Description: just a few thoughts about a passed relationship
Someone Special -------------------------------------------
We met on some Autumn day
I knew right at the moment
That there was something special about her
I'd never met anyone
And so perfect
Her ego seemingly formed at one with mine
And by the time i realized that i'd fallen in love
I'd never felt so complete,
To this day,
I still can't help but wonder...
If she ever felt it too
i give this a 2 for its shortness man. "Her ego seemingly formed at one with mine" is especially a well written line. though they may seem hard to come by at times push forward and work towards them. this poem ends with a nice transition making it conclude property. but what it lacks like i said is length. if it was longer it much just be an excellent poem for someone who is only 15 years of age...
Oh, that is so sweet but sad at the same time. I cannot believe at 15 years old you could write something so profoundly beautiful. I think if it would have been longer, something might have been lost with it. Wonderful work. Traci :)
good write man, and guess what?!?! relationships only get more complicated as you get older, darn these women! (I still love you all though!) My favorite lines were:
I still can't help but wonder... If she ever felt it too
It adds a bit of mystery and confusion to the write. I like how you first start off by describing this beatiful relationship and then just dropping that bomb at the end. Those three periods are just marvelous!
It's very short, and to personal to be given out to the public. I've commented and read your other poems before and they all seem to have the same problem. I think you have alot of potential and if you tried a little harder you could be a very good poet.