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    dots Submission Name: The Smiling Ladydots
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    Author: ladyngold
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    dotsThe Smiling Ladydots
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    A few days ago I gave her another dollar
    today I heard that she was dead, strangled.
    This lady beggar I knew from speedway
    I saw every other night or another... it varied.
    There she would be very humble and politely
    begging but always she would be smiling.

    I got this telephone call that she was dead.

    You see all the store regulars knew her
    but only as that smiling begging black lady.
    The newscaster announced her name and
    now we know who and where to send flowers.
    We will miss this smiling lady, but never
    knowing why she always happily smiled.




    Submitted on 2005-06-04 22:11:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...
    i was attracted to your page coz of your quote (the verse from Job... one of my faves really) and yeah... this is a really beautiful write...

    A few days ago I gave her another dollar

    right from the first line you hooked me in. the first line kinda appears from nowhere... like this is just a snippet of your life and it is obvious that there is history... another dollar... kinda makes me feel like ive walked in half way through the story... very cool.

    i love the power of the stand alone single line and think it would be a whole lot more effective if you were to avoid mentioning the smiling ladies death until that line... ya know...?

    the sentiment behind the write is beautiful really it is... it shows both the beauty in the smiling lady but also in yourself.
    im glad i stopped by...
    thank you
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely poem. Perhaps she smiled because she knew something we didn't. You don't have to be rich or even have a home to have dignity. One of my favorite books is The Old Man and the Sea. And I see the same humility and dignity in the lady you write about as that in the Old Man in Hemingway's book. People like that are so much closer to God through their humility then people like me. Maybe that's why they smile. At any rate I don't see anything to criticize here at all. I really liked it as you can probably tell. Thanks Cheryl.
    Bill
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, Cheryl, this was different, and sad, and a nice sentimental message in your story, too.
    Amazing how people we don't even really know can have such an important impact on our lives. You didn't even know her, and now you have a guy in Australia feeling sadness because some old black beggar lady in the States died.
    Incredible, and shows you the power of the pen.
    I'm proud of you for posting this, and the last two lines are easy fixed, somehing like:
    "We will miss this smiling lady, but never know why she always smiled happily." or something like that.

    Beautiful, sad story, thanks for making me stop and think about other people for a change. You're a doll.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a great write. There aren't many such as this and the message behind it is exquisite. Very appreciative towards the mystery that is some people and definately shows that you don't need to know everything about a person to be greatful towards their warmth. I like this very much. GOod words used good ways.

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful and touching. I can understand the sadness that you feel ;and even though I did not know her, I can share that sadness. we live in a desperately cruel country and a desperately cruel time. It is almost as if since we have no natrual predators to stalk us, we stalk each other and become our own predators. Sorrow to your sorrow. Love, Lynn
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't even think I could judge this ~ it's awesome and it shows the unjust, unbalanced cycle of life sometimes!
    I think this was great to share with us as it helps carry her smile over time & space.

    In the work I've done w/poor & homeless, I've oft found them smiling and actually content because they don't exist under the guise of society, politics, etc as a lot do. Truly Great Spirit's and Lord's lambs!

    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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