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    dots Submission Name: Castle of tunnels...dots
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    Author: ladyngold
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 585/520/99
    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Haiku/
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    Description:
       An elaborate ant hill.


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    dotsCastle of tunnels...dots
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    Castle of tunnels
    artistically ants create
    insect dynasty





    Submitted on 2005-06-05 00:44:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ahhh, -as a child I would wile away countless hours watching ants and their (ant)ics. This simple piece reminds of that. but at the same time the use of the word "dynasty" conjures up a parallel between the insects and some of the ancient cultures, Aztec, Egyptian and Mayan come to mind. They must have been fun for God to watch,-much more fun than then today's "ants" hopping commtuer trains and building glossy skyscrapers in mere weeks.
    I like, -much
    Sally
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. I never thought of ant hills beine castles of tunnels, but it is very appropriate. Excellent haiku and thought provoking. Ants are so interesting with their heirachy and orginazed lifestyle. Love, Lynn
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, to be as wise, as busy, and as productive as the ants.. then I might actually get something done
    This is a nice read. Great imagery.
    When first reading the title, I was wondering where you were going with "castle of tunnels". What a clever way of describing ant hills. And "insect dynasty" was great too. A very nice haiku. I enjoyed reading and imagining it.
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I find this intresting because just the other day I was watching a group of ants enter and exit there hill...and I thought to myself I wonder what is going on in there...lol
    They have a order that never seems to be broken.
    Nice job and glad to see you writing again.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm. Stare at any anthills recently? hehe.. No you are right this is a very good description of an ant hill... I do like this even though I'm not too fond of haikus *probably because I can't write them myself ^.^).
    -Alli
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this this is a new way of decribing an ant hill. i was not expecting this to be about ants. but this was a plesent suprise
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by forgotin_pain | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooh! Very nifty. Haikus are fun, because they challenge us to think about how to express as much as possible in so few words. It is a rather good exercise for people like me who tend to be wordy. Thanks for sharing this fun and thoughtful picture of the ants.
    Keep manipulating those words.
    Athalia
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by Athalia | [ Reply to This ]
      Before joining this sight, I really didn't like the whole haiku thing, but they are starting to become more interesting. This one was no exception :) I particularly like how your middle stanza kind of links the first two...you can read it either way and it makes sense :)

    Good writing!

    StW!
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      I am always just about speechless with your haiku wizardry and how well you get a point across in such a unique & talented way.

    The imagery worked as did the metaphor!

    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      you take the simple yet complicated beauty of ants in their world and make it a creative, artistic joy. i am constantly amazed by what they do. i love the idea of a castle of tunnels. it reminds me of the movie "A Bug's Life." you bring it to life! thanks!
    !Cat
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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