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    dots Submission Name: FUCKING you and HIMdots
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    Author: AfricanPrincess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 222/201/31
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 847
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 568



    Description:
       Quite self-explanatory . . . . . . . . . . . . . !!!

    (this is a sequel to "I wish you were HIM")

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    dotsFUCKING you and HIMdots
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    Baby!
    Baby!
    This is driving me insane
    Fucking you
    but dying to scream out HIS name

    "Close your eyes" you say
    "And lets do some role play"
    Shut my eyes go
    And oooh all i'm seeing is how HE let himself flow
    . . . on the tip of my breast
    . . . across my chest
    . . . gliding up my thighs
    HE had me craving for these highs

    Baby!
    Baby!
    This is driving me mad
    I can't fuck with you
    when i want HIM sooooo bad




    Submitted on 2005-06-05 04:00:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You know u need 2 stop. You tryna make me hurt myself w/this one. I love it. Keep flowing~~~. This reminds me of a situation I was once in.
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by InnerEnergy | [ Reply to This ]
      F.ucking hell, girl. This was damn good. I loved loved loved the rhythm. Sexy. "I wish you were him" was good but a lot more sedate. You just pulled out all the stops for this one. Don't stop with all the hotness, baby. You make it all sound so *good*... even a gay girl can appreciate the sentiment.

    drowning_queen
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by drowning_queen | [ Reply to This ]
      DAMN!DAMN!DAMN!gIRL YOU ARE REALLY OUT THERE!I have never known some one to be so bold with their [censored].Excuse me for my cussing but the title just interested me.I read I wish you were HIM and that blew me away, but when I read this ,I am almost speechless.Now you are making me want to read some more of your poems.Here is the parts that I liked:

    [censored]ing you
    but dying to scream out HIS name
    It was like you were ready to come out the closet that this other man is really blowing you away and he is not doing anything to ease your longing.
    Then when you said :

    "Close your eyes" you say
    "And lets do some role play"
    Shut my eyes go
    And oooh all i'm seeing is how HE let himself flow
    I mean you are really trying to get your point across to this man that he can't do it like HIM even if he tries to role play.REally really really good write.You have took my breathe away.
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]
      This is truly wonderful. I could feel the frustration and anguish coming off the page. It is terrible indeed to be [censored] someone and wanting to make love to someone else. You make me remember when I was young and wish for that back just for a few hours. Great.
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]
      damn... is this true or what?! i have been there, and in fact am there now! it sucks too... i love love this write, it's amazing and i give you big claps for it**

    Jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Girl that was bomb I'm glad i got a chance to come and visit your site This is great! 4 real You put it together so well and the rhyming was all there keep it up great job Peace Mysterious
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]
      Niceeeeeeeeeee ...i think alot of girls have been there...if not all girls ...I know i used to go searching for guys to picture ...my ex was such a dud ..Meh ...Good job ..i like it
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]


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