Description: Tell me what you think.You have to read the first part in order to understand the second part.
Too Opened Up (pt2) -------------------------------------------
Even though he has hurt her in so many ways
She decides to go back out with him and stay
Most people tell her to change her mind
And leave that no good dog behind
So here they are taking another chance
Trying to get back their sweet romance
He makes all his friends apologize
For laughing and making her cry
The money he had taken from his friends
Is going to her so she can spend
The camera in his room is thrown away
He wants to do right in so many ways
He hugs and kisses her more than ever
The sex is now way beyond her pleasure
It seems that she has really forgiven him
For making her life embarrasing and dim
He knew that in a few days
She would be having a birthday
He decides to plan a party at his house
And later on ask her to be his spouse
On her birthday he covers her eyes
Takes her in the house and shows the suprise
Everyone from school is there
To show how much they care
So her and her man start to dance
Take a few drinks and start to romance
He takes her by the hand and takes her upstairs
His great suprise for her is up there
Candles are lit around the room and door
Rose petals are on the bed and the floor
First they take a bath in the bubbles
Then he takes her to the bed to cuddle
She tells him its hot and will turn on the air
So she quickly runs down the stairs
She turns off the music and tells everyone
"Go upstairs if you want to see something fun"
Everyone goes upstairs and opens the door
To see something they weren't prepared for
He is hancuffed and lying naked in the bed
He is embarrased.He wish he was dead
She grabs her things and gets ready to go
"Iknew I'd get him back and he wouldn't even know"
But now she is wondering if she should tell
That she is beginning to swell
Hmmm, so many emotions in this write that I really don't know where to start. I will say there is noth'n like the fury of a woman scorned and pay backs can be hell! So, I will simply say you really done a good job on this write in my opinion. It is interesting to read and if you keep my attention thoughout the whole thing, as you have here it's gotta be good. Congrads on a fine write, !Doc`
I love this, the girl really did get her revenge but at what cost??? It shows that pay back is a [censored] and that karma does come back twice as hard. I guess the reason why i didnt like too opened up part one was because the girl got played and she reminded me of myself not that that happened to me, but it gives me hope that one day he will get his karma and i will get my revenge. This is another great write i love all your work keep it up, keep showing that emotion its wonderful Natie
I so have to agree with Natie's comments! this girl is real kick ass - 10 times better write and flow than part one . . . there was a time that i was thinking she might get played again but it turned out Surprisingly lovely . . . absolutely adore karma! Nadia*
this is good but it needs another one im hooked on the story also lol it sounds like something that could really happened maybe one day i'll learn to write a part one and part two lol maybe i'll work on it while im here in va lol well keep up the good work kristen
Submission Name: Too Opened Up (pt2)
