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    dots Submission Name: Seeking a Shadow Childdots

    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is about my inner search, looking for the innocent and frightened child parts that receded into the shadows in younger times when all of life was a game. Its time to come in.

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    dotsSeeking a Shadow Childdots

    I yell, " All-ee all-ee out be,
    everyone out come in free!"
    but the twilight stays still and vacant.

    When I was small
    I discovered a way to win at hide and seek.
    If it is played at dusk
    you don't need a large tree,
    or piles of leaves.
    Simply run to the deepest shadows
    and lay still.
    It works well.
    I have children hiding there,
    even after all these years.

    So I pick up a flashlight
    energized by dura-love
    to begin exposing the
    the spots of nighttime shade
    Mostly I find insects and arachnids
    with a few rodents that scurry from the beam.
    Don't worry if you see them running out.
    While I'm here, I might as well clean house.

    I keep seeking because there is a special place
    where big brown eyes open
    and sparkle against the light.
    Then I can stretch out my grownup hand
    as I whisper that playtime is done,
    and that supper is ready,
    so is a bath, story and bed.
    Each is warm and waiting.
    It is time to come in.

    She climbs into my arms
    and is asleep before we reach the house.

    Once the game is finished, the dreams begin.

    I feel that there are others still hiding.
    Tomorrow I'll seek again.

    Submitted on 2005-06-05 15:05:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love this Chrystine,
    it's like reductionist theory and asks
    what could you not love about yourself?
    what could you ever be afraid of?

    the mother seeks the child,
    the child comes home
    so simple and wise

    you're a wonder yourself sweet goddess,
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      this took me back to my childhood, playing hide and seek at dusk, eventually to be called in by mom for a warm bath, hot cocoa, prayers at the bedside and peaceful sleep... we all need to find that inner child and love and nurture her every day. simply beautiful, really. what a gem you are.
    | Posted on 2005-06-08 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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