My Finest Pleasure -------------------------------------------
It has been my finest pleasure writing with you sir
You have the greatest blood of any friend I know
It may be black and cold,
But you are not like them
You are the reason for my journal to be written on
The sure being of creativity
And sure, you sometimes drip a drop
We all make mistakes
Your label states you are French
But your origin means nothing
Even if you come from a land of baked goods and fine wine
You are still unsurpassed
And when you are ill and need a transfusion
I will run to the market
And kill the man who refuses to give me this remedy
After all, you are more important than some –man-
You are the words on my page,
And the color in my eyes
You sir, are the pen of a lifetime
And don’t ever forget it.
Well...the beginning is sort of confusing,but as the poem folds out then I started to realize what it was about.It was an original piece to me because you used different ways to write it.I can't see a thing to change.Good job.
OH MY! You've done it again. Another fine peice of work! I didnt know how it was going it was going to end up in the begining, only because i was a little confused. But It made perfect sence when I was done reading. Amazing job! And just because you can write and enjoy writing doesnt mean you have no life*
You are a crazy bastard. Crazy bastard. I read this last night and liked it but didn't *appreciate* it. This, my friend, is genius. How the fuck do you write shit like this? Amazing shit everytime your pen hits the page (or more accurately your fingers hit the keyboard). Personification is one of the best tools a writer can have and you exercise it with excellence. Never ever ever stop writing because damn then how would I entertain myself?
(Drools)... When you mix a classy writer with a classy subject, you're bound to get something fantastical. I did love it, though - 'And when you are ill and need a transfusion I will run to the market And kill the man who refuses to give me this remedy' - genius. Plus the whole idea of alcohol as inspiration and a trusted friend is something every good writer knows about. Loved the other wacky new stuff too.
This was awesome, Bill, to give life to a simple pen is a brilliant touch. It's funny how some of us take simple things for granted not knowing the origins or to fact that when they were created they were probably marveled at as genius. In this modern age what things do we take for granted for even the flowers in the fields are created from the work of something ignored. I am greatful for this piece. sincerely and respectfully mike :)
WWWWWOOOOAAAA!...a pen...i can't believe how beautiful this is...*adds to favourites*...teach me how?! lol...there's nothing about this that's negative at all...and as we're all writers here...well, i was amening at the end...*appluades*. Very original. leigh