Cooridor For The Lonely -------------------------------------------
Cooridor For The Lonely
mend this with a needle and a string
move it through the holes and marks
sever the cord with the pain it will bring
scrape the metal causing sparks
travel through the unknown passage
leading you to its pain filled core
sew your lips for this message
the hinges fell off the door
quickly and quietly shut it behind you
sniff the air, you can smell the fear
and what youve brought here
wont help in any amount
your just there so very near
tally up the scars and count
toss and turn upon its face
and smother what it once had been
grab the charcoal and trace
now peel back the marked skin
view what has been left
empty without its fill
this area was part of theft
and whats here you will now kill
pick up after yourself
these deeds have been completed
place these toys back on the shelf
this route you have depleted
please leave nothing behind
as you pack up your torture
takes notes for your own find
they have made a scorcher
exit now please be gone
thank you for your visit
glad you havent grown fond
not a bright place now is it
This was good...really intrsesting viewpoint...wow you had A LOT of imgary here...this was cool...I liked the use of scensory details. the end made it all come together perfectly...good write. I voted 4:) peace
This was really good. I liked how the last line tied it all together. I like writings that do that. Its like someone was living in a dreamworld and then reality set in and they didnt like the reality of the reality, ya know? Very well done. Have a good one.
Submission Name: Cooridor For The Lonely
