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    dots Submission Name: Like a paintingdots

    Author: Semper Fidelis
    ASL Info:    22/Male/ouahu, Hawaii
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 135/185/60
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       I just seem to get in these moods lately. I explained it to sum12luv. this is how I write

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    dotsLike a paintingdots

    Pass me up-
    Look over me-
    afterall I am insignificant-
    No one should feel like me.

    It's not like I care
    or anything-
    It's not I like I feel
    or anything-
    It's not like I long for someone
    or anything-

    All I want is to be loved-
    All I need is to feel-
    To reach out and feel
    contact, a connection-
    Something other than pain
    to let me know I'm alive-

    Like a sweet smell in the air-
    you know of it's goodness
    but you can't taste it..
    It's too far away.

    It's like a painting-
    You know how beautiful it is
    but wanting to be one with it
    is impossible-

    It just continues to evade me.
    I seem to have this fairytale idea
    stuck in my head-
    that one day that one girl
    will walk up to me being
    everything I wanted-
    Then we'd walk off into eternity

    But I don't know if that day..
    That sweet beautiful day
    will ever come.

    Submitted on 2005-06-05 23:47:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My friend I share the same thoughts
    I want to share something with you
    I am 37 years old and never once did I feel I was in love as in a romance
    I think I am afraid of the pain a romance brings
    I have only seen destruction in every single relationship ive seen
    True Love always seems to lead to pain
    That is what scares me
    By the way where are you stationed
    I hope and pray you are not overseas write now
    Please share with your fellow soldiers I am one man who prays for there well being and truefully Thank Them from the bottom of my Heart for sharing the same vision as me
    A world where everyone can feel safe and children do not have to grow up in fear
    God Bless you all
    Your Friend
    Ron Ramonas
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very interesting and heartfelt peice of poetry and deep emotions. You have written and expressed your feelings uniquely and with your own kind of style. I like the way you write and display your feelings in this poem and I agree you never know about love it could be right in front of you a long time before you even realize it is there and it just might be someone you know already, and that is truely amazing, I will add thia to my favs I enjoyed thi poem a great deal.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. To me, it says no matter how much a person puts up the front of being hard enough to not care, not feel, they still want to love and be loved.

    All I want is to be loved-
    All I need is to feel-
    To reach out and feel
    contact, a connection-
    Something other than pain
    to let me know I'm alive

    I like this stanza the most. Love can heal most any wounds and it's something everyone wants.
    The only thing critique I can come up with, and it's really not a critique is don't hold out for what you think is perfect. You'd be amazed at how someone you don't think about could be the love of your life.
    Good luck,
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      I can defintely relate...but i'm looking for a guy since i'm a girl. therefore i'm straight, lol. ANYWAYS, this poem is what alot of people could probably relate to. Sounds like a great song to! I think everyone is afraid that they're not gonna find someone to love forever. And sometimes i feel like i don't feel, like it says in ur poem. But with love you can feel and...i can't explain it out loud, i just know exactly what ur talkin' about, lol. Keep up this unexplainable but great writes up! lol
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by _NowOrNever_ | [ Reply to This ]

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