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    dots Submission Name: It wouldn't hurtdots

    Author: iN xO Love
    ASL Info:    15 F CT
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 23/26/10
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This is referring to my EX boyfriend who emotionally killed me, and i am always thinking about him so that is why i put the line ill carve your name into the bullet to show that he was the last thing i was thinking about!

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    dotsIt wouldn't hurtdots

    All my emotions..bundled up inside,
    im traped im stuck no where to hide,
    i cant even begin to express,
    all the pain, the hurt, the sadness, the stress,
    i'll carve your name,
    into the bullet,
    just shot me now,
    go ahead, PULL iT!!!!

    Submitted on 2005-06-06 18:30:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this is extremely depressing. If he did this much damage...he isnt worth your time. Dont dwell on him, find something else to do, like writing. It was short and the ending was a bit confusing. i think you meant "just shoot me now". Theres no real flow or rhythme to this. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by rockunsilenced | [ Reply to This ]
      im sorry. I hate that feeling.. i went through it for a long time. Except it was up and down, a greeaaat rollercoaster of stupid emotions. and ive finally got rid of it.. it killed me for a long time, because hes all i could think about and every stupid little detail of my day could link to himin some way. But after deciding that I WOULD NOT talk to him at all... I kind of got used to not talking to him.. adn eventually didnt even notice it :/
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by xnever_alonex | [ Reply to This ]
      Hah rock I agree to the fullest.
    You DO need to keep writing , at least to the point where it is flowing.
    Poetry doesnt really need a rhyme scheme
    And generally it is better without
    Rhyme schemes are hard to form most of the time
    So keep on the keepin on
    Big Bill
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      yes I agree depressing. The trapped emotions part jumped out at me which I can relate to. there are those who can wear their emotions like a sheet of glass but there are some of us the more deadly kind who bottle up our feelings only to manifest like a disease later. we are those type of people that get read about in the newpapers the murders, wackos, and suicide numbers but even more sad there are others who get sick wither away and die unknown, one of life's many unfortunate tragedies...good thing we have poetry to get our thoughts out on paper. I have found being here to be healthy and healing. hopefully you do too, keep writing let the world know that you are here and are here to stay, let all your feelings out in verse... let the heart and the mind fight and yet and the same time honor each other through your words :) mike
    | Posted on 2005-06-06 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]

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