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    Author: brokenbatman
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 475/233/44
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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       it could hasppen. just working on a story, feel free to help me out


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    the sphinx lives in my house. not until yesterday did i really know the truth. lying on my back, on the couch. my dog jumped up to share my spot. he managed to climb onto my belly, he is only as big as a large cat, to allow me the priviledge of stroking his fur. I did feel honored, after all he is a momma's dog. stroking this creature's smooth coat i casually looked up at him and i saw it. he was lying in the same pose as the sphinx, yes i know probably just a coincidence. witha little more observation time i realized he also has a strong resemblance to the dog face masks the egyptians wore in their ceremonies. creepy isn't it. i looked at chocolate, yes we named him something he cannot eat for fear of heart disease, and he squinted his eyes and almost looked through me. for a brief instant i felt like he was looking down on me. weird i tell you. but the gaze of his eyes was pure royalty. i understand this is absurd but i tell you i am tempted to ask him to reveal himself but i would be afraid he wouldn't take me seriously. you think egyptians could come back as dogs?




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