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    dots Submission Name: Glimpse of Resurrectiondots
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    Author: Samuel Bielz
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 151/182/46
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsGlimpse of Resurrectiondots
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    Falling from my lips into nothing,

    It seems my words are fleeting and vain.

    To the ears of men and Angels, meaningless,

    But to the ears of you, they become golden.

    Watching your eyes, Adrienne, it moves me.

    Seeing your sweet tears fall like celestial rain,

    As you hear the songs i write to you.

    It lets me know you're still alive,

    I know you are still breathing.

    Somewhere inside those walls of jaded hurt,

    Lies the angel I fell in love with.

    Reach out and grab me once more, my love,

    Trust your tender heart with my friendship.

    I want to feel the warmth of you again,

    Because of him, you've grown so cold.

    For so many years, you were all I had,

    And now baby, You're all I want...

    I love you.





    Submitted on 2005-06-06 23:13:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is a really sweat poem...the first bit..about the angles and her...that is very nice...you do a good job showing your feelings...i like the subtle shift from beginging to end...that is very well done...the poem changes with out us even knowing...good job

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    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]
      The title was a little misleading. I suppose you're implying the love was dead and there is a possibility of it coming back to life, but it was a real stretch.

    Nice sentiments and poem, lousy title.
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this alot. your emotions where full blown here. It was great, this was really amazing.

    "Seeing your sweet tears fall like celestial rain,

    As you hear the songs i write to you."

    i really like that part, just great imaginary!

    "Somewhere inside those walls of jaded hurt,

    Lies the angel I fell in love with.

    Reach out and grab me once more, my love,"

    i really like this part too, it just gives an overview of what is going on.

    "For so many years, you were all I had,

    And now baby, You're all I want...

    I love you."

    and i love this. its just really sweet, heh, im such a sucker for stuff like this..
    I really liked how you put, for years you were all i had and now baby, your all i want.
    very nice-
    great job!
    jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]



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