hey, this is a nice piece. the rhyming stays consistent throughout and the words you use fit the piece. *laughs* i've often dreamed about just letting those people who deserve it, have it... you know what they say, 'some people are only alive because it's illegal to shoot them.' wonderful job... keep it coming, -the wildchild
Why did you censor Hell, something that great shouldn't be censored. Sounds to me like somebody who gets made fun of so much that they want to bring a gun to school, then torture them completely. Then like, while torturing them hanging them by there hair then shooting them.. I don't know, lol. This is pretty good. Nobody really messes with me, but if people do. Sorry.. : Well, nice write.
Their carelessness and comfort, It will all just disappear, And you will send them signs so they will know That death and pain is near.
i liked this very much because it described in depth what you were thinking of at the time... this poem was an extension of a lot of peoples minds who went through and continue to go through the same thing.. so unfortuante.. but the beginning was kind of like a fantasy.. but you dead step it up.. so good job, keep writing