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    dots Submission Name: Anger From the Heartdots

    Author: SorrowfulMind
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Alton, IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 27/39/13
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
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       I wrote this for a group of people that could not stop torturing me a couple years back.

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    dotsAnger From the Heartdots

    The locks of hair begin to twist
    And knot so very tightly.
    It's not so big, but you won't take
    This situation lightly.

    They've pushed and pushed you just enough
    To send you to start breaking.
    You've had enough already so,
    Their lives you will start taking.

    The joy and bliss you feel from all their
    Screams of agony,
    Makes their lives a living Hell
    For all eternity.

    Their carelessness and comfort,
    It will all just disappear,
    And you will send them signs so they will know
    That death and pain is near.

    Submitted on 2005-06-07 01:31:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey, this is a nice piece. the rhyming stays consistent throughout and the words you use fit the piece.
    *laughs* i've often dreamed about just letting those people who deserve it, have it... you know what they say, 'some people are only alive because it's illegal to shoot them.'
    wonderful job... keep it coming,
    -the wildchild
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]
      Why did you censor Hell, something that great shouldn't be censored. Sounds to me like somebody who gets made fun of so much that they want to bring a gun to school, then torture them completely. Then like, while torturing them hanging them by there hair then shooting them.. I don't know, lol. This is pretty good. Nobody really messes with me, but if people do. Sorry.. : Well, nice write.

    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]
      Their carelessness and comfort,
    It will all just disappear,
    And you will send them signs so they will know
    That death and pain is near.

    i liked this very much because it described in depth what you were thinking of at the time... this poem was an extension of a lot of peoples minds who went through and continue to go through the same thing.. so unfortuante.. but the beginning was kind of like a fantasy.. but you dead step it up.. so good job, keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by daniel05 | [ Reply to This ]

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