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    dots Submission Name: in love with a feelingdots
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    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 337/334/97
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1290
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       I found out yesterday I will have a son, and words could not express how excited my husband and I are. I really wrote this because it is so unreal to have this love for someone I dont even know have never seen, but it is unlike anything I have ever felt befoure, and I love it...I love him.


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    dotsin love with a feelingdots
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    To begin love
    With a thought of you
    To make this in time
    Show
    Not even to have seen you
    And still so very in love
    Making my mind
    Swarm with the
    Thought of us
    Our new family
    Our new joy
    I'll make your life
    More than mine was to me
    Letting you know
    How important you will
    Always be
    I'm so in love
    With a thought
    Of the life
    We will share
    And I will make it
    Become more beautiful
    Then ever could have been imagined.




    Submitted on 2005-06-07 08:01:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awww...this was sweet and it reminds me of my younger sister and her five boys. Its funny to see her being a mother and all. I think you did a swell job in showing your emotions for someone who is already a part of you and will be for a long time to come. Good luck and have a good one.
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, beautiful title, and a sweet ode to your yet to be born son, don't forget to print it, frame it, and hang it in his room, he'll really appreciate it as the years go by.
    Very nice indeed, and congratulations!

    be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      someday i well prable be able to relate to this. but i am 19 and in no hurry. congrads though. i could almost feel the happy tears you must of cryed.
    raise your son to stand tall but not proud.
    to be wise and gental.
    teach him to be a good man.
    teach him younge and he well remember in his youth and teach his son as he grow old.
    much love.
    -snuff
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, that feeling is why so many women cannot give up their babies at birth and why surrogate mothers change their minds! great poem about soon-to-be motherhood which I hope you put in the baby book. excellent write! congratulations too!
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      what a beautiful gift, a new life! i love that you want to make a beautiful life for this person you have not even met yet. i am constantly amazed at the beauty of a woman carrying a life inside of her, it must be the most incredible feeling ever. i get from this that you will be a most wonderful mother. thank you for this glimpse of your beauty that you will certainly pass on to your son.
    !Cat
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, that is amazing! Congrats! im really happy for you..
    you did a great job of showing how you do feel, even though your not sure how.
    i hope that everything goes well, and keep us updated!
    jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoy the title and concept more than the poem itself- congratulations, though, on the bun- I hope it all works out well for you... Now back to thys concept of being in love (abstract concept) with a feeling (thought of an abstract concept) It boggles my mynd!!! I sit here- before you- boggled! For me thys requires further delving into... And so I am off to explore thys that you have given me to ponder... Peace, love and monkeys with jackhammers- !SiX!
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]


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