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    dots Submission Name: "That Nervous Feeling"dots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 600
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 940



    Description:
       kind of random, I know. But I thought it was cute, maybe a little choppy, but oh well!


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    dots"That Nervous Feeling"dots
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    Dragonflies, so many,
    dancing around in sync
    food unable to pass her lips,
    cheeks flush,
    eyes are glossy,
    beads of sweat trickle from her head.
    An ocean churning,
    deep inside,
    causing continuous waves of nausea,
    body is shaking,
    small convulsions that can't be controlled,
    so week in the knees,
    they can hardly hold her up,
    clammy palms,
    on unsteady hands.
    Anxiety sets in,
    like bolts of lightening,
    flashing through her mind,
    her mouth is a dessert,
    her throat is blocked,
    by the words she cannot say.
    He slowley leans in,
    kisses her long and soft,
    his tongue sends electrical currents
    down her spine,
    his fingers,
    entangled in her hair,
    make her body numb,
    the fireworks explode in her head,
    this moment was her reason for living.




    Submitted on 2005-06-07 10:57:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it really sounds like a nice poem and i really would like to read more by you and i know that a lot of people will like it. keep up the good work.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nothing like waiting for that 1st kiss!

    At first i thought it was going to be about having a panic attack but liked how it culminated with the kiss!

    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this.. It totally describes the first kiss feelings. I applaude it and give it a 4 good job.
    Ive been stalking you. LOL well maybe a little

    Star
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by Star | [ Reply to This ]
      awww that makes me wish my first kiss had gone like that... to bad it didnt

    my favorite part was the last line cause it was just plain sweet
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by andnow | [ Reply to This ]


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