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    dots Submission Name: Do I Deserve This?dots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/BrokenHeart
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       I am in love and the person doesn't love me back... and if he does then he sure as hell isn't sending any loving signals this way.


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    dotsDo I Deserve This?dots
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    Why do I love him when all he does is hate me?

    Why do I cry for him every night when he doesn't even want to see me?

    Why am I such a fool for the strong emotions I have for him?

    Why can't I control these feelings?

    Why do I have to live my life without him?

    Why do I continue to hope he loves me?

    Why do I work myself up for a moment to talk to him and when I try he ignores me?

    Why do I love him so much?

    Why do I like the love/hate mixture he makes me feel?

    why do I love him when he refuses to love me back and I get so angry that I want to hate him, but can't?

    Why do I love him?

    Why can nobody answer my questions?

    Why can nobody satisfy and calm my cries but him?

    Why doesn't he love me anymore?

    Did he love me to begin with?

    Why do I dream about him every night?

    Why do I wake up everyday with a feeling of loneliness?

    Why do I deserve this?


    Do I deserve this?




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      I know I deserve it cause I made the mistak in breaking up even tho I didnt see it but its too late.I really like your poetry cause I can relate.I guess everyone has this once(or twice) and some give up yet some want to but cant out of something pulling them to keep trying.Good work.Peace
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      A very painful and deeply emotional poem, It is a strong and expressive write and alot of people have probably felt that same way you did a good job of expressing your feelings. I enjoyed reading this one as well.
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      I LOVED IT! very emotional and it reminded me of my ex boi friend. i wish i wrote the poem myself. lol! did u break the relationship up with him? i hope u feel better. im still healing from what my ex put me threw. great job keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by Qutedia7 | [ Reply to This ]
      thanx for your comment on skeletons i dont mean to be ude if someone makes you feel this way find something or someone who doesnt love is not ignorance pain should be shared by 2 not just one i hope this makes sence and does not offend good emotional prayer
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      very emotional. and i really do hope that it works out.
    this is venting, but its much better, it shows your emotion, its not just words.
    You express your feelings and what you cant feel.
    It drags the reader in, my heart really does ache for you.-
    great job-
    jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting read. Very emotional. That one sounds like it came from the heart, unlike my story. :)

    I'd like to think I'm a pretty well-balanced and happy person. I'm not depressed, I just write things like that because I see it happening to a lot of people. I can't say I've never hurt anyone, but hey. Life and relationships are all just learning processes for how to handle retirement :P
    I'm not mad at my parents, I didn't write that piece about myself at all. It was just a rant I needed to scribble down. Nonetheless...thanks for reading my work, I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I enjoyed yours as well.

    Cheers.
    ~Orin
    | Posted on 2005-06-08 00:00:00 | by Orin | [ Reply to This ]
      very emotional its very deep i think everyone goes through something like this. so almost everyone can relate. this is very good keep it up and ill read more. ive read some of your other work to. you are a very talented writer and i hope that everything works out for you...Joy
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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