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    dots Submission Name: A Tree Near The Windowdots
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    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Tree Near The Windowdots
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    Tree branches from the window calling,
    lilting softly,
    waving lightly,
    like the foaming sea waves rolling,
    lapping on forever's young shores.

    From behind the new leaves, sunlight,
    streaming blithely,
    flaming coolly,
    like a fragrant old wind, whisp'ring,
    lapping on forever's young shores.

    Deep inside the sunlight, light sparks,
    dancing madly,
    whir'ling, laughing,
    dwelling in realms past the night stars,
    lapping on forever's young shores.




    Submitted on 2005-06-07 17:46:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the repetition of this piece. It fills the reader with a lot of imagery. Overall youdid a good job. :) Hope to see more.
    ~LeAnna~
    | Posted on 2005-06-07 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]


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