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    dots Submission Name: Green Thoughtsdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGreen Thoughtsdots
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    I tried to write,
    but the thoughts were too green.
    Perhaps they'll ripen in a day or two
    into a sweet, juicy poem.





    Submitted on 2004-04-08 09:11:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ah... keep track of those green thoughts cuddle. don't lose out of any of them - they're much too valuable.
    | Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this its simple, but i like it, im not sure if its b/ of the color green which is my favorite color, but anywho, i liek the way you compared it to a frit and having to wait for it to ripen, good write
    | Posted on 2004-04-08 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. It gave me a great picture in my mind....Little green tomatoes...just waiting for them to ripen so they can be picked and savored and shared.....
    | Posted on 2004-04-08 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      I too think this poem was short and cute, well thought out and only the beginning if something better. good write...
    ~Jaime Lee Pachétte~
    | Posted on 2004-04-08 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]


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