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    dots Submission Name: I AMdots

    Author: Dark Angel
    ASL Info:    20/Human/North Carolina
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 261/292/84
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsI AMdots

    I am the breath that you take every morning when you awake.
    I am the shimmer in your eyes when she makes you want to cry.
    I am the quickened beat of your heart when she touches you in the dark.
    I am the gentle touch of fingers sending shivers that seem to linger.
    I am the turmoil that fills you when you're afraid of what to do.
    I am the tilted head you show when you are trying to let her know.
    I am the softness of your kiss that you place upon her lips.
    I am the strength that you contain when, a wild horse, you tame.
    I am the ominescent light that burns throughout the night.
    I am the beauty that you see whenever she's walking down the street.
    I am the thing that people give in order to truly live.
    I am God's gift from up above and my name is LOVE.

    Submitted on 2005-06-08 11:39:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was good the imagery was great i like the pic you have you discribe many emotional states in your piece enjoyable to read i am not sure about the i am repeating though but it seems to work in this post
    thanx for your comment on untitled it is a very deep poem thats why its called untitled so everyone gets there own meaning
    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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