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    dots Submission Name: My Infectiondots
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    Author: Dark Angel
    ASL Info:    20/Human/North Carolina
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 261/292/84
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMy Infectiondots
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    We were young and happy
    But deep in our minds
    We had hidden secrets
    That no one could find

    Emotions, once buried,
    Now resurrected
    A once healthy mind
    Now deeply infected

    Infected with hate
    That a child should not feel
    Infected with emotins
    That seem so unreal.

    Angels once strong
    Suddenly weak and confused
    Blinded by one's hatred
    Of loving the other two.

    Happiness becomes a shield
    To hate and misery
    Drowning in his ocean
    Choking and unable to breathe

    Striking them once more
    Yells and continues to scream
    Strips the beautiful angels
    Of their innocent sanity.




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