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Submission Name:
My Infection
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Author:
Dark Angel
ASL Info:
20/Human/North Carolina
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3.09 - 261/292/84
Words:
104
Class/Type:
Poetry/Serious
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My Infection
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We were young and happy
But deep in our minds
We had hidden secrets
That no one could find
Emotions, once buried,
Now resurrected
A once healthy mind
Now deeply infected
Infected with hate
That a child should not feel
Infected with emotins
That seem so unreal.
Angels once strong
Suddenly weak and confused
Blinded by one's hatred
Of loving the other two.
Happiness becomes a shield
To hate and misery
Drowning in his ocean
Choking and unable to breathe
Striking them once more
Yells and continues to scream
Strips the beautiful angels
Of their innocent sanity.
Submitted on 2005-06-08 11:43:12
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