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    dots Submission Name: One Weekdots
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    Author: PiecesOfMyHeart
    ASL Info:    14/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 22/21/9
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 240
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 532



    Description:
       Yeah so the relationship i wrote this about lasted around two weeks....great one....lol.
    Anyways, just let me know what you think. It's a little weird for me but hey....


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    dotsOne Weekdots
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    It's been one week,
    So why do I feel this way?
    One week,
    Yet I'm hopeing that you'll stay.

    Only one week,
    But this feeling must be love.
    One week,
    It's pure inocent like the heaven sent dove.

    Simply one week,
    not even a firm foundation-
    One week-
    for my hearts underlying creation.

    After one week,
    I've never felt so true.
    It's been only one week,
    Yet, somehow, I love you.




    Submitted on 2005-06-08 12:18:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well . . . i dunno . . . i'm gonna tell u what i think i guess, i thought it was pretty boring. didn't grab me by the balls - so to speak - but it doesn't have to . . . you'll probably develop into a better writer or something. just go for deeper and more twisted feelings instead of just using surface feelings.
    | Posted on 2005-06-08 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a good poem i can relate...Love is a strong emotion but it can take over you in one week, very repeptative though, we knew it was one week! lol but i think as time progresses youll get better..! GOod Idea though..
    | Posted on 2005-06-08 00:00:00 | by iN xO Love | [ Reply to This ]



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