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Author: Restless_Heart
Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 44 /35 /16
Words: 111
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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I have no idea, just gimme something.


The beauty, The flow,
Moving pushing me on,
Keeping a love of life from dying out,
It keeps me here,
It keeps near the only place in the world I do not fear.
Scared of it, never will I be.
Good enough to get on stage and scream
Make you sway and keeps you sane.
Before you know it you'll be longing the words night and day,
Believe me when I say I love it,
Believe me when I say you'll enjoy it.
Beauty everlasting, never fading.
So go now
Use your talent, Sing
Sing the music I love,
I will be big one day.

Copywritten 2005

Submitted on 2005-06-08 15:50:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i agree with storm of bliss on this one

I don't think this is one of the best ones you have ever written.
It really isn't like the poem is gonna go ne where it's like still water with bugs flyin over it... it's hazy and not clear as to what you want to say.

but this is definately not a joe work that i like
sorry for the derogative commentary but im honest but i still love you
Peace Out Samm R
| Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by Raven_s Miser | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked it...sort of short...what kind of music are you taling about or are you talking about all of it?love the concept though even though its short.
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by intoxicated411 | [ Reply to This ]

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