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    dots Submission Name: Your Weapondots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 649
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 876



    Description:
       I love him, he loves me, he's got her, I've got nobody...blablablabla....If two people want to be together, what can stop them????


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    dotsYour Weapondots
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    You're playing unfair,
    in this game you have started.
    You have a weapon,
    her,
    she is your weapon,
    that you are using against me.

    Every time you say her name,
    my heart begins to bleed.
    Every time I see her face,
    it suck the breath right out of me.

    She is your security,
    your sheild,
    to hide your love for me,
    and to guard you from mine.

    Slowly you are killing me.

    With each kiss you give her,
    I can feel the sting.
    Each time that you embrace her,
    I can feel the pain.

    She is your weapon against me,
    I am helpless as long as she's got you.

    I am empty inside,
    unable to be whole again,
    unless you can find the courage,
    to finally let your guard down...




    Submitted on 2005-06-08 17:00:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Never happened to me, but I can feel the pain. Mean people out there should die. I really liked it because of how you described your feelings.
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by ShatteredGlass | [ Reply to This ]


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