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    dots Submission Name: Imaginable Miserydots
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    Author: Desser
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 89/95/44
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 258
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsImaginable Miserydots
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    The shard of glass
    It's slowly cutting deeper into his chest
    He doesn't feel it
    But it's getting pushed farther, deeper

    That dagger pinning his hand to the ground
    The blade is twisting
    The blood squirts out and splatters his face
    He doesn't move in anyway

    The sword sawing his leg
    The leg he tatooed himself with his meaning
    It's amputating the bone
    Any second now it will break

    The noose around his neck
    Pull it tighter
    Rid of his insanity
    Blind him of the images that curse his mind

    He sees black now
    The stars are not glowing
    The air he breathed stopped flowing
    The shard popped out and with it came his heart.




    Submitted on 2005-06-08 19:21:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i have to say that i agree with altered_sight I'm not quite sure what the poem is saying. i think that is has a very deep meaning that i jusdt dont get because it seems that it is a powerful piece even though i dont understand. good work though lia
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that does seem a pretty needlessly violent to me. I mean, I think the entire point could've ben brought across to the reader in a just as equally effective way if not so gruesome. Of course, I guess I don't really know whether to take this piece as an issue of suicide or just plain exaggerated emotional angst that isn't particularly acheiving what it describes "physically."
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]



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