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    dots Submission Name: lostdots

    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       this is me sad.....

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    She touches me,
    I turn to go.
    Some part of us remains.
    The rest is scattered
    in books, in songs and all around...
    to torment me.
    And I from her,
    I leech away...time heals and removes
    each day a little more.
    What comforts me, my only solace,
    that doubles as despair,
    to know I've left the best with her
    in flashes of remembrance.
    My desperation and my love,now as one.
    I can care no longer.
    I've lost...myself,
    another day, another part, another dream...

    Submitted on 2005-06-08 21:42:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is [censored] unreal man.are you o.k.?at least you got away.if that [censored] shows up again?, leave a message.i'm around.let me know.nobody gets away with that.
    | Posted on 2005-06-08 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually think this is very realistic and it's amazing for it. It's all honesty, an open personal explanation. I can't really tell if it's told from experience or not (I can only hope for your sake that it isn't) but either way, it gives a good perspective on the harshness of such a situation...
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a real emotion and your poem so well, captures that :

    "Some part of us remains.
    The rest is scattered
    in books, in songs and all around..."

    Time heals the worst of wounds. Just stay strong, friend. Nothing good gets away :)
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]

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