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    dots Submission Name: My Life Was Worth Livingdots

    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       okay it's not excellent

    it won't be studied throughout millions of schools, analyzed and dissected by students and readers wondering at the mechanisms of my mind

    it's much too elementary for that

    but it is very honest

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    dotsMy Life Was Worth Livingdots

    My Life Was Worth Living

    Life and I don't get along
    As fights and tears all drown my song
    And though it's short, it seems too long
    Me being alive just seems so wrong

    Others deserve so much more to live
    Others have so much more to give
    When I think of all that I have been
    I break down and I feel sick

    Where smiles should have been I brought tears
    Where laughter should've rung I brought fear
    And from everywhere Iíve gotten leers
    From parents to friends to strangers to peers

    If I had tried, I could have shared
    So much love, if I had cared
    But it's all lost, and I don't know where
    To go, so Iíll pray one final prayer

    I pray to whoever listens, not for myself
    That happiness will find everyone else
    Live life to the fullest, give your very best
    Itís too late for me, but not for the rest

    Oh, someone that hears me, I ask you to be
    The best person you can; don't end up like me
    And if I change one life, then perhaps Iíll have peace
    My life was worth its living; no more need for me to breathe

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      I loved this as soon as I read the description. It may be honest, but you are misinterpriting your life.

    I love this with a capital 'o'. The message is good, but you consider your life done, and that is just stupid. Do you realize that you can give more than you can expect anyone else to give?

    You're much too young to give up hope, even if life is hopeless. Chin up kiddo.

    Not her hero anymore.
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
      Right away this annoyed me because the rhyme scheme was so inconsistant. It made it hard for me to just concentrate and read the poem. Also some of the rhymes were a little forced which compromised the content of the poem. As for the actual content...it was alright- nothing particularly original about it. Anyways keep at it.
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Katj | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that this was really good, yes maybe the rhyme scheme was off but either way i liked it. i thought that the msg in here was great and deep. i dont think your life is over i think there is so much more to give. dont give up yet you are young and have everything ahead of you. and yes that may sound like a load of bs. but its true. i hope to hear from you and keep up the good work...Joy
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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