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    dots Submission Name: Cloudy hazedots
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    Author: sadistchild
    ASL Info:    16/f/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 96/87/20
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 576
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    Description:
       Umm. I left the group I was sitting with and this poem was written by myself to justify it to me, basically.


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    dotsCloudy hazedots
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    Wandering through a haze
    that clouds the world once seen.
    Searching for a reason
    to stay and be with them.
    But only finding reasons
    that support the will to leave.
    Reasons to stray from the path
    and find the truth in this.
    I know they'll question everything
    in their desperation.
    But I've been questioning
    for ages
    And I just can't find the answers,
    not with them, not now.




    Submitted on 2005-06-09 01:24:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is surpisingly well down

    like you said it is justifying...but not in a whimpy way...

    you use your words elegently, and give us a good strong explantion as too why it is you felt them

    good job
    on the flipside
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]
      the "them" is a mystery which I like, I dont why why but i think of the church probably because my "them" would be that if this were my poem. the haze and clouds sound like a change in perception perhaps you have a new view of things being away from the "them" described earlier, whoever the "them" are when they are unmasked. chilling. the path, meaning the path of life with its choices. in finality being without the answers you seek maybe the answers do not lie in them but us. sincerely mike :)
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]


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