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    dots Submission Name: Demanding Livesdots
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    Author: suzanne
    ASL Info:    41
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 47/59/25
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 769
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    Bytes: 903



    Description:
       just some thoughts that run through my mind at times someone to relate.


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    dotsDemanding Livesdots
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    We run, we jump, and still
    we can't keep up with our
    demanding lives.

    Always someone needing,
    wanting;demanding our
    attention,never giving up,
    always relentless.

    Just one minute I'd like to myself.
    Just to take a breath, to catch-up.
    To all their demanding; demands.

    So much to get done, but never
    enough time in our demanding lives.
    Wondering am I just chasing my tail;
    is it really possible to change our lives?

    To slow everyone down that much.
    Or would I go crazy from boredom.
    Maybe I really like the hussle and
    bussle of everyday life.

    If things were not so demanding
    how would I react.
    Our lives can be demanding but
    atleast we have a life after all.
    Atleast we have a life after all.




    Submitted on 2005-06-09 01:34:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was, I felt, not one of your better poems, but I could really tell what you where trying to say in it.


    hope to see more
    Akili
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      hey this was good but i cant really tell what it means but i think that is just me. i think i need to get a ity bit smarter
    Peace out,
    Sunny
    -suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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