Description: Tell me what you thought of the end. Should i have tried to make it ryhme. Is it to long?
There was a time -------------------------------------------
There was a time when she thought she loved you
There was a time when she thought she couldnt go on without you
There was time when you were everything to her
But now thats all just one big blur
When she caught you with another on that painful mourning
and struck without warning
She lashed out at her called name after name
She kept this up until it dawned on her that you were the one to blame
She turned and she stared at you horrible thoughts running through her head
But as she continued stare she remembered all the wonderful things youve done and all the beautiful things youve said
Rembering these things made the pain grow even more
She left and wanderd around till she ended up at her mothers door.
Her mother sat her down and told her that he was beneath her
It took a while but all her memories of you just
good job gena! this is really good and im not just saying that! i disagree with Chell i dont think that theres too many shes and hers but that ok! but i do agree with Chell about you shoudl try to make it rhyme but it doesnt have to! hey ill send u the application to be an editor for that magazine! love ya loads gurl! ~akaila~
damm chell gave one long azz comment. she's like a fvcking english teacher. anyway i liked this one as well. i hate it when guys mess over girls like this or vice versa. hope u find someone that'll treat u right "troy"