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    dots Submission Name: Beauty of Naturedots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 827
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    dotsBeauty of Naturedots
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    Seclusion,
    my own private sanctuary,
    of pure beauty.

    Nature speaks to me,
    softly,
    as the sun engulfs me,
    with it's comforting, warm rays.

    The awsome scene,
    before my eyes,
    is breath-taking.

    A small wood bridge,
    has many kots a cracks,
    telling a story,
    of a glorious lifetime.

    I sit upon the bridge,
    my legs dangle over the side,
    the brook babbles beneath my feet,
    in a smooth, steady pace.

    A blue bird land on a branch,
    outstretched,
    over the crystal clear water.

    A magnificent willow,
    sits close by,
    arms hang with age.

    So many decades of knowledge
    hides inside it's thick trunk,
    with a hollowed center,
    which is it's eye of wisdom.

    I lay back,
    let the beauty of nature consume me.
    No sadness can be felt,
    no chaos can be heard,
    so peaceful...

    I think I'll stay...




    Submitted on 2005-06-09 10:05:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The poem isn't bad, but when you describe nature, try to hold to yourself what you are currently doing when wathcing the beautiful sights...unless it is necessary for the reader to understand more of the poem. Other than that you can put great images on the paper, that I really like.
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by shoggoth | [ Reply to This ]
      I love any piece inspired by the spirituality of nature! I like when you can be transported to those moments when the poet was inspired. Great job! Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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