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    dots Submission Name: Smilesdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 636
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 300



    Description:
       Love,Peace,Joy!!!!


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    dotsSmilesdots
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    Mona Lisa smiles
    as the sun strokes
    brush her face

    Sands of time
    a beach of life
    current keeping pace

    Hues of color
    paint the day
    Love is in the air

    The day floats
    like the current
    on without a care




    Submitted on 2005-06-09 11:35:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this piece. i love the flow and ryming (even though i don't care to much for that kind of stuff, its really whats inside the piece that counts) and i truly hope to read more by you. i think that you like to paint and that is what i read in this poem. i see the colors that you explain. i really appretiate your work. keep it up okay.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      your opening lines are wonderful! brush stroking her face to make her smile, beautiful! this just moves gently like the current, the waves of the ocean. great work, Tiff!
    !Cat
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      People do not need to see Leonardo da Vinci's paintings at all! We have you now! No, truly, I find the same piece and mistery as I found in his painting.
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by shoggoth | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece is wonderfully soothing. Though it was pretty short, it was still good. Very well written. Nice imagery and nice flow. Not much to say here except nice job! I really liked this one!
    Alissa
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! 5 for 5...errr 6 for 6 six reads, six comments bravo 4 you :P...Nice imagery on this piece. Like a summer love poem :)

    Keep writin!

    Stw
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaah, Tiffany, I read more in this, a description of a lady so much in love that no matter what the day brings, as they roll by with no purpose, the "mona lisa" smile is always on her face
    Sort of an inner radiance.? Now that I think about it, and knowing you, this could also fit someone in love wtih life and the Lord!
    When you're in love, who cares where the current takes you?
    I liked it lots!

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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