die sweet death by Oli

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Submission Name: die sweet death dots

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Author:	Oli
ASL Info:	20/F
Elite Ratio:	4.3 - 202/206/52
Words:	96

Class/Type:	Poetry/
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I don't know why I wrote this. I was inspired to write when a friend of mine was playing the guitar. This probly sucks but oh well.

die sweet death dots

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Swing low now sweet death
I have something to live for
now swing back sweet death
miss me by an inch
for I no longer want to die
not today
not tomorrow
some day you'll come
and take my life away
from the one I love
but think not victory
for I will have fulfilled my destiny
I do not fear you
you will not win
for I will beat you at your own game
death, you shall not conquer my soul
I am not yours

Submitted on 2005-06-09 11:58:18 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  My, my! This is one of those poems that makes you think. It makes you really sit and ponder your destiny, and why we're here, doesn't it? Beautiful. I have nothing else to day...but I'm happy that music (in reference to your guitar-playing friend) inspires you as it does me.

Keep writing,
Checkered Cow
| Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Checkered Cow | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm...my only thing against this is that it should have been longer. awesome write, really made me think but I wish it had been a few lines longer. good words used good ways.

Blessed Be!
| Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
  im guessing by this poem you once wished to die but now you have something good in life and you dont want it to leave. i hope that your will to live stay strong for there are many people who care. though i understand what it feels like wanting to die but i liked how you said "swing low now sweet death" because its saying i know eventually death will come but not by my choice. i liked the way you expressed yourself in this poem. i hope to read more of your poetry in the future.
| Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
  This seems to be somehow different from the usual angst, probably because it actually has some hope for the future in it.
Looking death and depression in the face and teeling them to go away is hard, and this little uplifting poem describes it well.
Well done

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is more loike how i write by the ending that last sentance just blows people out of the water. This about death and you being victorious over it shows a strong side in you, something that shows you have hope.

Death is a very contraversial thing to write about cause there are the people that would say, to think of death as your way out would make you the weaker person or the person looking for the easy way out. then there are the people that think death as a sin in the form of suicide is wrong and you will forever punished in the depths of hell to end the pain you are going through. THis is a great write sorry i rambled on so much keep up the great work and i hope to talk to you soon.

ACE
| Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]

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