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    dots Submission Name: My Anam Cara (revised)dots
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    Author: _winky_
    ASL Info:    25/f/minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 664/529/96
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       Anam Cara means Soul Friend.
    Sponge Mop means a wet mop with a sponge as the absorbent.

    for those who didn't know the meanings.


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    dotsMy Anam Cara (revised)dots
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    Hey there stranger, please donít cry.
    I know the reason so wonít ask why
    My shoulder for you is what I provide
    And I promise to always stay at your side

    Help you find yourself after each flop
    I am after all your sponge mop.
    Clean up the mess after the gale
    Never asking for any detail

    Within all your break-ups and lovers you see
    Iíll help mend the pieces they leave for me
    Find a new strength to pass onto you
    No matter what, Iíll get you through.

    Friends donít leave when it gets rough
    They stand by your side and call your bluff
    Even when you slam the door in my face
    Iíll be waiting arms open for you to embrace.

    Remember these words I speak to you
    Iím going to be here no matter what you do
    By your side I will always attend
    Because forever youíll be, my soul friend






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      Wow. I like this. If you don't mind I'm going to show this to my best friend. I love having a friend like this. I think everyone needs a friend to be there no matter what. This is a great write. I hope the friend you wrote this for apreciates it.

    -Caitlin :)
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really sweet poem.

    The only thing I really have to say is this...the first stanza seemed slightly forced, and sometimes (I'm unsure of whether or not this was intentional) they seemed out of rhythm.

    But I love the idea of the poem itself!

    Keep writing,
    Checkered Cow
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Checkered Cow | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Jennifer,
    I liked this a lot :) When I saw you defining Sponge Mop, I first read it as SpongeBob and had to reread it :P <never new spongebob was used in that manner!> But great heartfelt poem, with a nice rhymin' scheme! :)

    Keep up the good writes!

    Stw!
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      awww i want a soul friend now. This is really sweet! I wouldn't change a thing and it's going on my faves if I remember to press the link when I finish here. awesome write, couldn't have put it together better myself.

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
      it reminds me of something out of chicken soup for the teenage soul.

    i love the comparison of a sponge mop to a soul friend.. it is a great metaphor..

    the only thing i would change is the simplicity of the ryhmes.. like "do" and "you"..
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by fallingingreen | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was very good in my opinion
    And true it was a -bit- forced
    But it was flowing
    And down to earth, to be honest
    Whatever that means =p
    Big Bill
    | Posted on 2005-06-09 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the loyalty and sentiment in this although it feels rather sad...as though this "soul friend" is using you and that you are not getting the same support and devotion in return...just the sense of someone who is very self-absorbed and unaware of the affect they have on you (or maybe I'm reading between the lines and am way off base)

    Anyway...nice piece, flows well
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]


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