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    dots Submission Name: I Think. I Feel. I Am A Fool.dots
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    Author: Reckoner
    Elite Ratio:    5.04 - 122/164/128
    Words: 412
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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       Stupid little boys think they can fiddle with the most beautiful female spirits, just cuz someone tells them that they love them...very few boys or men for that matter know the difference between a friendship, a little pure security and true love.


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    dotsI Think. I Feel. I Am A Fool.dots
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    Same old story
    He jumped the gun much too early
    Gotta know
    "I just gotta fucking know"
    When the words come out in the first hour
    If her eyelashes rub your chest
    Make you heart blush within the first week
    A fucking week
    You say
    Theres nothing you can do
    I know your an idiot
    Time to admit it
    To someone
    Preferably her

    Married over night
    Inside his feeble little mind
    He would be scarred otherwise
    "I love her, I really do"
    "Cuz thats what she said to me"
    Dude, she didn't really mean it

    Your shooting your mouth off in the worst way
    Making promises to sweet hearts with clenched fists
    You don't even shake when you lie
    Just politely bow and then lift the gun from your side
    The bullets may not even penetrate her
    Cuz the weapon you hold may not even go off
    Until you aim it towards your own head
    Don't feel sorry
    Don't feel anything
    Why start now
    The first kiss
    A little invisible tongue
    You lied to her
    Boy, you did it

    You really fucking did it
    You heard it and you lost it
    Of course she was happy to do it
    She was happy to have any new friend
    A real friend
    Not you

    You spoke with chattering teeth
    Basically an uncertainty
    A friend to her worst enemy
    To get a simple glimpse
    Of what you never should of seen
    An angels body layed across a table of old bad habits
    No priest
    No sculpture
    This place that only I pray
    You came and went
    Stuck it in my face again
    "I got it and now we must become one"
    Now you have gone too far
    And my poor girl must swallow her tears

    She was saving it for me
    It made her cry
    It fucking made her die again
    And yet she repeated it back to you
    "I love him, I really do"
    "Cuz thats what he said to me"

    She is so strong
    You wish you knew
    You will never know
    Beautiful in ways that few can truly describe
    And so brave
    No one will ever get a glimpse of these things
    Cause she gives them all to me
    When she speaks for real
    She speaks to me
    You just saw a body
    Heard some muddled lullaby
    That she had already spoken clearly before
    To me
    To me





    Submitted on 2005-06-09 22:32:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      man...this just reached into the core of my heart and flipped on really effin bright light...I went through a bad break-up last night and this is so close to my own story it's bizarre. I needed to read this and I thank you for your honesty and creativity. the piece held up a mirror for me to look in and recognize some important things. good work...just a couple thoughts for edits..."just to have a any new friend" is that supposed to be "to have any new friend"? and "what you should never of seen" should probably be "what you never should have seen." just little nits I be pickin...nothin' big. Really, this is dead on and I have enjoyed a lot of the pieces you've posted here. nice.
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by Jemma Dumptruck | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey you.. this is pretty awesome.. um.. is the narrater the guys spirit? talking to himself.. I dont know just guessing.. but what I got out of the poem was awesome anyway.. thanx
    Shaun
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by shanu | [ Reply to This ]
      angry much?!?!hahaha. yup...this is cool. and you and I both know that your muse was Tim. weather you want to admit it or not.lol. but you already did admit it...so that made absolutely no sense...anyways...I'ma go now.lol.
    later gare bear...keep on keepin on


    XOXOXOXOXO,
    me
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]



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