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    dots Submission Name: Sojourn at Hadesdots
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    Author: Memphis
    ASL Info:    21/f/Right Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 130/158/31
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 295
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 452



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       I haven't written anything in ages now. This one emerged from the hazy spot in my mind (where most of what I write comes from.) As always, all feedback is welcome and highly appreciated.


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    dotsSojourn at Hadesdots
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    Crack, Baby
    And then shed a tear for me.
    Not three or four,
    Just a singular tear for me
    To set my soul at ease
    As I cross the River Styx.
    That way,
    My mind’ll be cool
    As I wage war with fire and brimstone
    And all things unpleasant in between.
    Your lovely, crystalline tear
    Will steady my soul
    As I cross the twisting road of coals
    That ultimately leads to you.




    Submitted on 2005-06-09 22:46:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hi Memphis!
    Not quite sure who is who in your poem, which confuses me a little. A real baby? Your lover? Is she, he dead? Will you rejoin him after a life of trial and tribulation. I like the power of this poem. I like the vocabulary. I do have this need for clarification though and I think your poem would be the better for it.
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey its been so long. Well its good to knowe you're finally back.

    I love it, but I agree with Arthur on who is who. I mean I have more background but, Who is crossing fire to get to who? Is it it you on the journey, or are you the goal?
    But its soooo good...good job man.
    tricia
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Sundance | [ Reply to This ]
      aha now I get it, its just one of those poems that even though have a very good point just looking at whats said. But since I have a backstory then I understand alot more.

    Maybe you'll get your tear, or you already did. You know sometimes things come in the form of one thing, when your expecting them in another.

    by the way I'm not encouraging anything. I wash my hands of this.
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Sundance | [ Reply to This ]



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