Description: Vampires represent anything that is in the way of your goals in life, in this poem.
A Drowned Whisper -------------------------------------------
The stake driven through the heart
the vampires die in a short drowning breath
they whisper that they will see you in the darkness
fear the shadows for that is where they will wait
they will prey upon your weakness and feed on your mortality
stripping away your hope
and erasing your fantasies
they will hover above your head
every time you pass by the darkness
when they strike you will caught wrestless
in distress
your mind will be consumed
with so much
they can see your eyes
and will wait for blood
when your sucked dry
every bone collaspses and there's nothing left
you lay there motionless
listening to the lullabys of your empty soul
every meaning and value
is killed, giving you nothing to believe
so you turn to the brood
for redemption
because they own your being
your drawn in by thier lies
and blinded by deception
you believe everything because there is nothing you believe
you start once more as a child,
of tears
you do not taste the salt of your tears no longer
they have become bland on your tongue
but thier are those who turn to the vampires
but then spit in thier eyes
the grow angry with you and haunt you evermore
you strike at them with wooden stakes
pierce thier gloomy hearts with arrows of fire
they hate you for your perserverence
they envy your will
and jealous of your individualism
for they have to travel in swarms
so you win
thier bodies strewn over the dusty ground
in mangled, bloody shapes and forms
and you chuckle at thier foly
yet remember you were once one of them
hmmm *sits pondering piece* its well written and the images are awesome. just,...i'm not sure i want to be a vampire anymore. *big sigh* and i was so looking forward to it. *giggles*
This is really good, the imagery and all, but my dear friend, I am quite the vampire, and not like this explanation, I can be sweet, sometimes sour, but usually quite nice, I wouldn't dare stand in the way of your goals, perhaps just feed off of you a couple of times, not enough to kill you, but to give you something to write about, lol, I like it though, and cuz its about vampires, you can guess where its going!
Wonderful poem when I read it I didnt really think of vampires I thought more of my "ex-bestfriends" because thats just what they did to me, I think is wonderful how you can write about vampires and when I read it Im thinking about the vampires being humans lol. Keep writting
Submission Name: A Drowned Whisper
