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    dots Submission Name: Tell Me, Teddy Beardots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
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    Description:
       i wrote this yesterday night and i really like it. it sounds like a child who misses being a child.
    hope you all like it.


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    dotsTell Me, Teddy Beardots
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    Tell me, Teddy Bear,
    Why do I love him?
    Tell me, sweet stuffed toy,
    Why is my world so dim?

    Why won't you answer me?
    You used to talk before.
    You were once my comfort.
    Why aren't you anymore?

    I used to sleep with you.
    I'd hold you in my arms.
    I'd cry into your sweater.
    You'd keep me free from harm.

    Where are you Teddy Bear?
    I miss your button eyes.
    Tell me where you've gone.
    I don't remember saying, "Bye."

    You said you always be there,
    But we have lost each other.
    I've lost my sister... brother.
    Come to think... I've lost my mother.

    I found you, Teddy Bear!
    You were underneath my bed.
    Now let me tell the stories,
    That reside inside my head.




    Submitted on 2005-06-10 14:29:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this, I like the tone and the creativity and the fact that it is a teddy bear poem, there aren't many I know...cause I have written my very own teddy bear poem. M kay
    talk to you later
    Jazmine
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      A teddy bear is good for so much more than people think. Hey, I'm 23, and I still sleep with one. And sadly, I spray him with my ex-boyfriend's cologne before I fall asleep. Then I wake up smelling like him, so I don't know if that helps or hurts more... Oh, well. I could totally relate to this. My poor teddy bear gets rants all the time about "why doesn't he love me? or I'm so sad. or Why do I hurt so much? or Oh, lonely me." Anyhow, good job. Oh, The title of my poem is French for "the little death." Apparently, that's what the french refer to an orgasm as...
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great poem. I really like they way you asked it questions and it didn't anwer back. The reason being that I had a friend I used to call Teddy that I used to tell everything to and turn to him when I was lost and he passed away. I still try to talk to him but get no answers back. Awesome work
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by melody10977 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it .../. this is art / theres nothing new i can say i just love it / the teddy bear was the best visial you could give .../. this is going on my fav list .

    janus
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this one, reading it you can almost hear the little girl at the begining then progressing into a lady and its really nice very good.. keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
      hi this was good too many years have gone by my teddy bear got lost if only they could talk aye great idea and terrific write i enjoyed this one a little different than the usual titles on es geat write
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this..I love the fact that u use the teddy bear as item that will always be there for u even through u have left it... im adding this to my favorites
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by Kueen_Emerald | [ Reply to This ]
      As everyone else has stated I too miss my teddy bear! You did a terrific job with this poem. This is something that anyone and everyone can relate to and you really brought out what innocence is all about. Something that far too many of us miss. It was a pleasant read!
    dreamweaver
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      this is terrific im definately adding it to my favs list. it seems that when we get older we forget about childhood friends till we need them. but it never fails that they are there. great read i love it keep it up great work...Joy
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I still have my teddy! I still have my ratty, tear-stained sounding board. His stiches have been re-sewn, his eyes glues back on, but he is still my confidant. He was so very happy when I got married and didn't sob on him so much.
    I loved this piece. Did you know that some other writers have been having a game of posting about teddy bears? I think this is my favorite Teddy theme so far!

    Thanks for sharing!
    -Chell-
    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      This was so innocent. I really liked it. The one thing that you could count on as a child...you grow up and is no longer what it once was. This was something that I can relate to as well. I had a "pillow person". I don't know if you are at an age to remember the "pillow people"...but I had one and I LOVED that thing. I still have it...but he's just not the same...his leg has undergone surgery twice now...his colors are faded...poor thing. But, I can't let it go!

    Wonderful!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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