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    dots Submission Name: When Love Callsdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsWhen Love Callsdots
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    He turns
    Time stops
    In a breathless moment,
    Eyes lock
    In a fantasy
    Of what could be.

    She turns
    Her smile
    Speaks softly of hunger,
    Hearts beat
    And murmur of the mystery
    And of what could be.

    Chorus
    When love calls,
    No amount of running
    Can save you
    When love calls
    No amount of running
    Can save you.

    Time turns
    Hearts lock
    Lips speak of future
    Hands hold
    Wear rings of intimacy
    For what can be.

    Chorus
    When love calls,
    No amount of running
    Can save you
    When love calls
    No amount of running
    Can save you.

    Bridge
    All in a breathless moment
    In the blink of a mirrored eye
    Two lonely people become one.

    Chorus
    When love calls,
    No amount of running
    Can save you
    When love calls
    No amount of running
    Can save you.
    When love calls
    Are you gonna come running
    When love calls
    Are you gonna runů




    Submitted on 2005-06-10 14:57:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this song, it makes me wanna hold on to my girl and hope she doesnt want to run from me. The one thing that i have learned is there is always that breathless moment that never seems to end and you feel like you are one with the person you are with, ah i love that feling it is the only time i ever really feel whole, but i always seem to get thrown away.

    Those last lines are one in a million. are you gonna run, what i want to know is it to love or away from it, you left it open for the reader and i dont know if it is on purpose or what, but that is the best way to end any write. it lets the reader use there own imagination to finish it out.
    That feeling of time stopping. amd the never ending feeling between there own veiws of each other. It does seem like a fantasy, well in your own mind.
    one last thing i like how you put it in booth the mans and womans point of veiw.

    Lovin it keep up the great work

    ACE
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]


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