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    dots Submission Name: She is Misseddots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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       This is about a friend who lost her nan!


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    dotsShe is Misseddots
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    She is missed.

    She was the backbone of the family
    Her arms were a shell
    where I would retreat.
    I was soft like a snail,
    But as prickly as a hedgehog
    And sometimes I would bite
    And she would bark at me.

    She is missed.

    She was the heart of our home
    Her smile was sunshine
    and could melt my icy demeanor,
    Even when I was truly hot-headed
    (Although I thought I was cool)
    Sometimes I would purposely burn her
    And sparks would fly between us.

    She is missed.

    She was a fountain of useful knowledge
    And she led this horse to water
    Though I stubbornly refused to drink
    Something obviously sunk in.
    I spouted such shit in those days
    But still she showered me with kisses
    And poured on me, her love.

    She is missed.

    She was my nan, she was my mother.
    I took for granted what she gave
    And never valued what she taught
    Until the day she was no longer.
    Only then did her words linger in my ears
    And her love speak volumes to me
    Only then did this fool listen.

    And now she is sorely missed.





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      Aw, this is sweet and sad. My paternal grandmother died about ten years ago, and I'm still not over it. She was one of the few people I could really tell how I felt sometimes because she would give it to me straight that I was acting like an idiot or needed to grow up or whatever. I took her for granted, and we butted heads too, so this really sounds like me. I like the images of animals for anger and strength and the hot/ cool imagery.
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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