Description: I changed what this song was gonna be about when i started writing the 2nd verse. So it's about a relationship with a friend that kinda got mest up and is slowing getting sewn back together
Had I Told You... -------------------------------------------
I live a lie
But I hide it right
No one can see
Past walls I call eyes
You'll never know
What really is true
Which is just fine
Cause you never knew
If only had I told you...
I'd rather have a friend in the dark
Than be alone in the light
I'd rather reveal all my scars
Than be empty inside
I'd rather rip out my heart
Than live with pain all my life
And I've fallen apart
Since our flame has died
We're intertwined
Through our memories
Tell me I'm fine
Like we used to be
I don't feel alive
The same old story
I told you once
But not the whole truth
Now that you're gone
I wish that you knew
If only had I told you
I'd rather have a friend in the dark
Than be alone in the light
I'd rather reveal all my scars
Than be empty inside
I'd rather rip out my heart
Than live with pain all my life
And I've fallen apart
Since our flame has died
Since you left me
I feel like a lost you
You know I'm bleeding
You're what I hold on to
Now that I have told you
I'd rather have a friend in the dark
Than be alone in the light
I'd rather reveal all my scars
Than be empty inside
I'd rather rip out my heart
Than live with pain all my life
And I've fallen apart
Since our flame has died
I don't live a lie
So I don't have to hide
I'll let you see
Past walls I call eyes
Now that you know
What really is true
I feel just fine
Cause you already knew
This is pretty nice. There is a sort of revelation and relief to what you feel and what your friend feels, reveal in the last line. I especially like the lines : "I'd rather have a friend in the dark Than be alone in the light I'd rather reveal all my scars Than be empty inside" It some what reminds me of how i feel right now, don't know if i made the right choice by pushing someone away. I hope it is all working out for you. Best of luck, ~Alina
I like what you did with this...I agree with Alina about her favorite lines...that is my favorite part also. And I like how you repeated the idea from the beginning at the end, but with the little change..I think it worked well. But if I HAD to pick one part that I really didn't like as well as the others...it would have to be the line .."our flame has died." I dont know what it is about that line, but to me it feels like it just doesn't flow as well as the rest of the lines. But that is just my opinion...and that is being a little bit picky with it. So I did like it and I think you did a pretty good job. Can you actually sing it, or are they just the lyrics? Take care, Amber
Submission Name: Had I Told You...
