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    dots Submission Name: Are you listeningdots
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    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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    Bytes: 922



    Description:
       I was just trying to let out some pent up feelings and this is what came out so if you comment please dont get caught up on the deteails.


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    dotsAre you listeningdots
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    I talk to you
    Telling you my hopes and dreams
    Are you listening
    I tell you the siily stuff
    ...In hopes that we can share a laugh
    Are you listening
    I share my problems with you
    Hoping that you that you'll have helpful advice
    Are you listening
    You've never told me that my hopes are in reach or that my dreams are important
    Your not listening
    You never laugh when i tell you the silly
    Your not listening
    You never try to help me with my problems
    Your not listening
    You try to convince me that your listening by repeating bits and pieaces of what i said.
    But i know your not and the fact that you cant listen tells me that you dont care
    You may say you love me everyday but
    words.........
    arent
    enough




    Submitted on 2005-06-10 21:22:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this is so true. THis is horrible and Im sorry that youve had to experience this but some people are just jerks. He/she is suppose to be yur friend and your pouring your heart out letting them know what you want to do, what you want to make of yourself and they completely try to blow it off and say that theyre listening. Just because they can rexite a few bits and pieces of what you said doesnt meant that theyre listening at all. I think this is a sort of what not to do for friends sort of thing... I loved the ending though that added such the perfect touch to it all...

    words...
    arent
    enough

    which is true words arent enough. somebody can say they love you but if there not listening to what your really saying or if they dont care about your dreams and hopes and what you want to make of yourself than to me sying I love you means absolutely nothing. Yet again I say that Im sorry youve had to deal with this, Ive been here before too and it totaly bites.
    Good Luck in the future and keep up the great writing!
    ~manda
    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very good! Repetition...there was a lot of it. I read it without the repetition and liked it...with the repetition...liked it. I'm just not a repetition fan. But the overall story of the write was excellent. Many people just sit and listen...they just don't interpret. That's the problem. You often waste a lot of breath.

    Good job!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I totally hear what you're saying. I've had people that I thought I could lean on, be so void of emotion when I would lean on them- it really sucks. The twist in the poem is good.

    words...
    aren't
    enough

    is so very true and a good thing to realize. Too many times people lean on those words, without showing it in the simplest of ways. The thoughts in this poem are very good and strong.
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      I can understand this completely. I have found myself in this situation quite a few times. But you are right when you say
    words...
    aren't
    enough

    Alot of ppl think that is enough but sometime i guess you must realize that it isn't. I believed that once but now i realize the only person i really trust any more is myself who i dont trust very often either. I'm a little strange but arent we all! LOL.

    Ria
    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by ria_pixie | [ Reply to This ]
      really repetitive! wow... I know it's a rant, but wow... ok the listening part is just way over presented I think that you could have put some imagery in there, I didn't feel the beat or the rhythm. I felt let down from this one and I know how it feels I think every one does cause every one has some one that doesn't listen to them.
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by hidden lady | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a really good poem that I can totally realte to. Sometimes I feel like my friends and family aren't listening to me. Um, by the way you are is spelled you're not your just to tell you.
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by blind.who.sees | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so relatable to me right now. This rant has struck a chord with me. I think the repetitiveness compliments the poem and drives the point home. This was well written and a good read. I think I am going to take a look at some of your other writings. Keep at it and take care.
    -Katj
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by Katj | [ Reply to This ]
      hey gena! this poem is great great great! ya ur right words arent enough! but i listen to u! a lot cuz ur just like me in many ways! we should be like siamese twins or something! i love the ending! words... arent enough! love ya gena!
    REMEBA THAT IIGHT! CALL ME!
    ~AKAILA~
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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