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    dots Submission Name: Regretsdots
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    Author: AngelOutlaw
    ASL Info:    21/female/OR & WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 672/392/64
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    Bytes: 1448



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       Just random thoughts. Tell me what ya think.


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    dotsRegretsdots
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    I know the taste of my own tears too well.
    My cheeks are damp, my eyes wet again.
    I don't know why I bother with makeup,
    When all it does is run down my face.

    I will laugh again,
    I'll smile again.
    I will dance again,
    Sing my own song.
    I will laugh again,
    I'll smile again.
    I will dance again,
    Sing my own song.

    I know that tone of your voice much too well.
    That look in your eye, you cannot hide.
    Why do I bother to apologize,
    When I know that we will fight again.
    All I've known for so long is regret.
    Missing you, needing you,
    But you're not there.
    But I know

    I will laugh again,
    I'll smile again.
    I will dance again,
    Sing my own song.
    I will laugh again,
    I'll smile again.
    I will dance again,
    Sing my own song.

    You have been such a big part of me,
    But I'm letting go.
    I don't need you,
    I don't want you anymore.

    So I can laugh again.
    I can smile again.
    So I can dance again,
    Sing my own song.
    I will laugh again,
    I'll smile again.
    I will dance again,
    Sing my own song.
    I will laugh again,
    I'll smile again.
    I will dance again,
    Sing my own song.




    Submitted on 2005-06-10 23:44:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its pretty ok...more of a pop song stuff
    I know that tone of your voice much too well.
    That look in your eye, you cannot hide.
    Why do I bother to apologize,
    When I know that we will fight again.
    All I've known for so long is regret.
    Missing you, needing you,
    But you're not there.
    like this para though...check out my song so long,take care and untitled n women n lots more let me know wat u thnk
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by anooplokur | [ Reply to This ]
      i think this one made pj feel kinda guilty. i know this one isn't about him though. if it is i'm gonna sit u kids down and i'm gonna have a long talk with the both of u. good write babe.
    ~troy
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      thanks so much for your comment on "Losing Reality" it's nice to hear encouragement especially about such a been there, cut that type a thing...oops bad pun.

    i liked this, it was sad yet at the same time spoke to everyones inner core...you should really look into sending lyrics in...and reading it makes me think i'm hearing a great song in my head

    looking forward to more music from you;-)

    -Cherie
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by throughmyvoice | [ Reply to This ]
      I would love to hear the tune to this. Lyrics only truly come alive with music and imagine this would have a really catchy verse to sing along to. A sad but survivalist song. Kate xoxo
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      Was this influenced by My Chemical Romance? Laugh again, dance again... I can't remember the song now, which [greatly] annoys me. However, I did find these lyrics good to read and definately going to a band such as MCR. Good write.
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      The lyrics are quite good. I do have to say that the flow is a little off, but particularly in the first verse. It just doesn't have a smooth flow. I like the chorus for the fact that it sheds hope on the misery portrayed in the rest of the lyrics. Just work on eliminating unnecessary words that take away from the rhythm of what you're writing.

    When I know that we will fight again

    I cut out the that and maybe change it to we'll...just my tke on it though. The lyrics are very good...I'd like to hear the music behind it!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      i hope this one isn't for me. if it is, let's talk about it. it made me sad that you still feel like this and i feel kinda responsible. please let me know what's on your mind. love u~P.J.
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I am glad to have read this. From the looks of it maybe you should concider writing songs and having them published.

    I don't think I'm outa line for saying this. It would be a song of despair. But it would still be great.

    I hope all is well... Good luck with summer break and keep writing. I'll be around ^_^
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by Unicrom | [ Reply to This ]


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