spiderweb life -------------------------------------------
Our hearts are spider webs,
woven with truth.
each one connected
by a spider called “life.”
decorated in a pattern of hope
and building our webs in one tree
in a style like community.
that way we can always return to our roots.
every fly is named “love”
we wait for our spider to bring in a fly.
when he does, he’ll wrap it in silk.
So we never lose it.
with a single tug and a single pull,
one glimpse of an encounter,
we become closer entangled.
This was a good piece, however the flow of it was rather choppy and it could have been longer. (Though if you were looking for a short piece you might want to change the ending a bit, it was a bit stop and go). Other then that it showed a new way of thinking. I would have never thought of life as a spider web. (Btw, loved the part about being able to go back to your roots and all being part of one tree).
i like the way that this poem does resemble life. Capturing love as a way of resembling a fly, is a different view point but is understandable the way ur coming from. The fly gettin tangled in the web, like gettin lost in love. yeh, i enjoyed this piece! keep it up ! (Y)
I like the metaphor of spiders. Definately original. The flow was fair but the imagery was good. I am afraid of spiders. I had to kill a pretty big one that was on my ceiling the other day. Anyways, keep at it and take care. -Katj