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    dots Submission Name: Turning The Wheels Of Timedots
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    Author: suzanne
    ASL Info:    41
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 47/59/25
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Story/Love
    Total Views: 789
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    Bytes: 1217



    Description:
       This is a fantasy made up story about my future husband.


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    dotsTurning The Wheels Of Timedots
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    I slowly turn back the wheels of my mind,
    to recall your face, it seems faded now.
    But slowly things come into focus,and I
    can recall the embrace we shared, the time
    I saw your face,we were young and crazy in love,but it was never meant to be.
    You've faded away from my sight only to
    become a fading memory.
    My minds wheels are turning faster now,
    into the present, then to the future.
    Trying to tell me what may lay ahead.
    I see a man off in the distence calling
    someone's name.
    He seems to be looking at me.
    The picture is comming in clearer.
    He's a mid-average man about twenty-eight or thirty in age, and has long brownish blonde hair.
    I can't see his eyes, but now i can hear what he's saying.
    Please Suzanne follow your heart ,and follow me to a life of utter happiness and love.
    The love that you have waited for.
    He must have been sent from heaven.
    He's my perfect match.
    We slowly walk together towards our future,
    not caring what it might hold, knowing
    that together we will manage anything the future
    may unfold.




    Submitted on 2005-06-12 01:59:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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