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    dots Submission Name: Where else would I be?dots
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    Author: hotrodruss
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 396/342/116
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
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    dotsWhere else would I be?dots
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    Where else would I be?

    You asked me where would I be
    If I had a choice, would I be with you
    Well you should know that by now
    There is no other place, no other person
    That my heart desires the most

    Where else would I be?
    But alone with you in my arms
    The world around us has no limits
    We are free to enjoy one another
    Where else would I be?

    The stars are every where tonight
    Just count them in your heart
    You know thatís how much I long for you
    To be in my tender arms
    Whispers of love in our ears
    As we sit together underneath the moon
    The cool breeze stirring your hair

    You tell me where else would I rather be
    But alone with you in my arms
    The world around us has no limits
    All time stops forever
    We are free to enjoy one another
    Where else would I rather be

    Let the world around us take notice
    That we want to be alone together
    Let the folds of our love grab us
    With a passion unknown to even us
    As the moon and the stars from on high
    Wash over us with a heavenly glow

    Where else, where else would I be
    Where else would I long to be
    Where else

    © hotrodruss




    Submitted on 2005-06-12 03:23:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful. This poem expresses your feelings amazingly. I really like it. My favorite part is where you describe the two of you sitting under the moon and stuffs. You have talent and I hope you write more.
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by blind.who.sees | [ Reply to This ]


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