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    dots Submission Name: It Started with a Yelldots
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    Author: shombray
    ASL Info:    18/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 103/91/26
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 775
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1482



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       When you first read this poem you are going to want to know what happened? Well you have to wait because this is only PART1 and theres two more parts to go.Tell me what you think is going to happen next and maybe I can tell you if you are right.


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    dotsIt Started with a Yelldots
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    Shamica couldn't see it coming
    She couldn't even tell
    Shamica never thought of running
    When it started with a yell

    Jamal was the man of a womans dream
    Every girl was dying to be on his team
    But Shamica stood out from the rest
    He wanted her because she was the best

    A simple date created thier fate
    And now these two are soulmates
    Jamal pleased her in every way
    Shamica knew how to make his day

    A year later they have a big fight
    And it continues throughout the night
    His voice raises and he begins to yell
    she thinks he's "trippin" from what she can tell

    The next day they both apologize
    They want to work it out. They want to try
    But this second arguement gets much bigger
    He raises his voice and then he hits her

    She gives him a great big suprise
    By hitting him in his right eye
    Now they are both hurt from the fight
    They decide to quit and call it a night

    But her love for him is still growing
    And his love for her is still showing
    They decide to still stay together
    And really try to make things better

    Shamica couldn't see it coming
    She couldn't even tell
    Shamica never thought of running
    When it started with a yell









    Submitted on 2005-06-12 04:16:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dude, I am so confused. Another two parts?! Ok, so I'm assuming abusive relationship is on the cards. One were they both doing the abusing, and they both love each other still. Is it not about humans or something? ! On the subject of the poem, loved the rhyming, and the short stanzas. But I'm waitin' on these other installs!
    Thumbs up... So far.
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by TristesseDurera | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this was good! ok what i think will happen they will get in another fight and say things they both regret he will either hit her really bad and put her in the hospital or he'll bring out a knife or a gun that will send her running somewhere either way he'll start yelling at her and she will leave or end up running away from him anyways good write keep up the good work and cant wait for the next two
    kristen
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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