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    dots Submission Name: Lament To A Frienddots
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    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 507
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 735
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       I really don't shit that this doesn't make sense

    I'll be the first to admit this isn't my best

    But anytime you spill anything, even emotions, and just leave it there, it never ends up looking good

    Just staining

    So Eva, this is for you. Take my rant as you will; no editing, no draft, no nit-picking, no sense

    Just fragments of my thoughts that I typed for you.


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    dotsLament To A Frienddots
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    no more talk of crying
    forget what's happened
    im here, with you beside you
    even if you dont want me around you
    will you stand by me?

    no matter what, youve been there
    no matter what
    friends till the end, so if the end draws near
    will you cry for me?
    what if it was over
    and we went our seperate ways
    loss of something so precious
    even satan would protest that righteous link broken
    cause me and you, we're meant to be
    like sensible adam and party animal eve
    so if we do leave
    don't you forget about me

    and even if, should my final breath pass between cold lips
    will you still treasure golden memories?
    of days before cravings set
    of life before complications began
    before abuse, and being trapped
    freedom, oh freedom
    something we could not help but want

    innocent
    paying for crimes we could not help but commit
    if its wrong to be young and foolish
    we were guilty
    save the hopeless, rescue the damned
    we waited and waited for a savior
    but our christ never came
    so we carried our own crosses
    and we sacrificed ourselves

    could you dare to let go of that?
    could you venture out to a hating world
    without knowing there is always one person you can call
    and know they'll listen?
    is it just me whose world would spin out of control?
    ill be there, yah yah yah
    you got a friend

    remember times when we laughed
    and joked and talked
    of things that we thought
    of that which we forgot
    is the reason our friendship was wrought
    in concrete

    "oh, when i look back now,
    that summer seemed to last forever,
    and if i had the choice
    yah, i'd wanna be there,
    those were the best days of my life"

    you are my line from insanity
    mirror for my vanity
    my party for catastrophe
    my escape from reality
    harsh harsh reality
    friends for life, friends till death, friends we are, the very best
    you are my angel on earth

    you're my angel, you're my friend
    i'd give my life for you
    through life's turns and twists and bends
    i can always count on you
    like the dots on the ceiling
    infinite is this feeling
    of love for you
    as endless as God's sight
    is the hurt which alights
    as we argue over what's right
    we never talk just to talk anymore

    i long, for days
    of singing away
    our problems together as we sailed across a sea
    of friendship

    let it go and we can sail past the horizon
    that was once the place
    where my wildness and your common sense meshed
    we dont need lines
    we dont need rules
    we dont need any pain
    we just need eachother
    that's what friends are for

    please don't lose me
    please don't leave






    i miss you






    where did we go?






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      Cherie...

    My defenition of friendship: Friendship is the comfort, the inexpressible comfort of feeling safe with a person having neither to weigh thoughts nor measure words, but pouring all right out just as they are, chaff and grain together, certain that a faithful friendly hand will take and sift them, keep what is worth keeping and, with a breath of comfort, blow the rest away. The state of being friends; friendly relation, or attachment, to a person, or between persons; affection arising from mutual esteem and good will; friendliness; amity; good will.

    and to me you fill every single requirement above and beyond expected your the best friend a girl could have, I LOVE YOU!


    this poem shows how much friendship means to you, it sbeautiful the collection of words, and you choice of phrasing is beautiful i love you cherie!

    <3,
    pierced heart
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by PiercedHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      This is absolutely beautiful. So many friends come and go throughout life, but there are only a few who are worth a poem (or "collection of random thoughts") like this, and that is really special. Great job...
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by YouLied | [ Reply to This ]


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