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Beautiful Imperfect


Author: Von Django
ASL Info:    32/M/UK
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Words: 73
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Beautiful Imperfect



Pretty liars cling to their ego angels
Burning, so high, I cant touch
Get the most
From the icons you fuck
They're just as shallow as you
Those glossy dreams don't ever come true

Moles and scars and words that sound wrong
That beautiful imperfect is where we belong
Mascara stains and guilty pains
You know it's true
Coke and models
Dont love you like I do






Submitted on 2005-06-12 16:55:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I see very similar characteristics and themes in your poems and I think they are very beautiful. It reminds me of a song called "beautiful wreck". It's nice to see beauty portrayed in an unbeautiful and original way. I especially like your opening line"pretty liars cling to their ego angels". However I do think you can go much deeper and imrpove these poems even more. I think if you leave them for a month or two and then renew them you may be able to improve them more. Otherwise a very good poem.

Aimee x x x
| Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by xdollpartsx | [ Reply to This ]
  it is those imperfections in people that are the most interesting and lovable i find.. who wants to be perfect anyway, and what is that? i love your title, and that is what drew me in to read this. thanks for sharing and reminding us.
!Cat
| Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmmm, this is a thought-provoking little poem...
At first I thought it was directed at someone in show-biz, but I think I got it in the end, with a loved person hanging around a "better" set of friends and forgetting her roots?
Whatever your meaning, I like stuff that gives one a chance to voice a theory, so well done

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this..
it was really very deep in such a short time.
it just really made me think..
Your form and whole wording just made it all jump out at you. Like you had to understand it.. you knew you did, if you dug a little deeper.

i have nothing negitive to say what-so-ever.
Great job, again!
jennifer
| Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmmm... dont like the first stanza but love the second! The second is so deep and i relate to and understand it. "Beautiful imperfect" is a great description. Nice work.
| Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
  wow!!!! that piece throw me for a loop, i don't know what your inspiration exactly is for this piece but you are kicking down some serios knowledge and life lessons with just a few words that is really something to be proud of, that is talent.
This is a piece that i relate to in so many ways i can hardly find the words to tell you how much i appericate you for writing it.
Thank you
nicolette
| Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by k.o.malley | [ Reply to This ]
  This was quite a different read. Desriptive and unique comparisions. Whatever the meaning, whoever dirrected at- I enjoyed this. It made me think.
| Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked this. It has a great edge to it. The flow is perfect, and it makes the reader really think. I had to read it a couple of times to understand it, but I think I got it! hehe. You have a different style, and I like that. I hope to read more from you!

*hugs a plenty*

~Avry~
| Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]


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