Description: Thanks to Vancrown for a perfect edit on this. I made a few minor alterations with it, but otherwise I think it came out awesome. Like I said before, there will be a lot of refelction comming out of me in the not-so-distant future. (pardon the pun)
Surounded by Mirrors -------------------------------------------
Constantly surrounded.
Always made aware of the shortcomings
And the excess materials
And the effects of gravity
The mutilation will not be forgotten
The scars can be seen
When there is no barrier
To protect the truth
They are all oblivious
Could not care less
About what is happening to me
It's like they have created their own world
My world is full of hate
For those people who do not care
For those who do not see
And those who take no notice
The world will live on
For those who are not in mine
But mine will stop
And no one will notice
I can barely see my reflection
It's a mere shimmer in the glass
But a broken soul can be seen
Forever to be forgotten
They say that mirrors reflect the truth
Funny, they look in the mirrors as well
Yet they only see what they want
Mirrors can lie
My picture is forever torn
My reflection forever lost
My soul will be lost
And never to be found
Mirrors can be broken
My shadows come out
From their hiding place
Looking at this world
My shadow and soul reunite
To find solace
In their problems
That has been lost in the reflective glass
great poem umm i liked most of it and umm i wanted 2 say the thired stanza seemed a bit iffy the last line seemed a bit out of place(maby it was the way i read it). i thought it was ausome it is one of my new faves. it would like be one of ur best it u were 2 change the last line in ur thired stanza kk just suggesting. <3 keep on living happy
You know I've been a bit behind on my comments because I've posted a lot lately and just saying thank you has been difficult to keep up with all of it, but I have wanted to drop by long before now and tell you what I thought and to thank you for the honorable mention you know, and to say "you're very welcome, anytime!"
This turned out beautifully and the edit you went with kept the spirit of your first write and harnessed it, made it stronger, and clearer, so you know . . . good job and all that jazz! The other mirror piece is also beautiful, even better than I remembered, so you took my silver nuggets and turned them into diamond dust.
Reminds me of a house of mirrors. Each has its own thing, each its own reality. It's really creepy in there too; twisting what really is to change it to what it wants to see, and soon all you can see is what everything else there wants you to be o_O...
Great poem, by the way, flowed really well, and I loved the last line. Actually, that line made me skew away from the actual content of the poem to make me think back to that house of mirrors, and the individuality is lost in the "reflective glass" because you're not who you are anymore...weird, anyway that's just my two cents. Or paragraphs. Man, I wonder why they're called Paragraphs, if a graph has nothing to do with this, and para means out of...
Great poem!I loved the last line.it flowed really well. this is an awsome piece very creative. i really enjoyed it.i like the trueth about this piece. lia
WOW!!!!!!!!! This is genius! This has got to be some of your best work. I just want to reach out and hug you. In fact, l'm on the way, my car gets pretty good gas mileage, I'll can you when I get close for directions. Later, Travis
I like this one a lot too, it has a lot of truth in it and some of that people won't want to hear but i like it, there are no spelling errors and the flow of the poem is strong the whole way through, I'd have to say that my fav lines of this one are "My picture is forever torn My reflection forever lost My soul will be lost And never to be found
Mirrors can be broken My shadows come out From their hiding place Looking at this world"
and i like these two a lot because they talk about never being found but then talk about how you can make a answer to that problem, and that you then fix the problem. and there is always an answer to every problem whether it is clear or not.
Submission Name: Surounded by Mirrors
