Description: Written when I finally left my last boyfriend, about a month ago, when I finally realized I couldn't feel anything for him at all.
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Comments are always appreciated.
it had alot of emotion, you did a great job on this. Most people would just write a rant or something of the sort but this was very well written. I liked your form. it kept you reading, didnt drag you down. The ending you might want to work on..
"You’re bad for me You think they don’t know.
It’s all wrong.
You know... I think they are right. I think they know.
I think you should go I think you should leave."
just this part.. it just didnt seem to flow as well. But the rest of it was great. Good write! jennifer
I really enjoyed this. The simplisity and emotion just catches you. What would usually be portrayed with angst was instead portrayed in a somwhat sorry way, as if you were sorry he never knew you. Very well done. However, i agree with Jen, the flow did seem to lose it's touch with that last bit. Maybe an ammendment? Even if not, a good read.
Submission Name: Leaving
